Second Peer Blog Response

Katherine, you have chosen a very interesting topic to blog about! While reading the first notes you took about what seemed to be on a movie, I was extremely interested, interested about what these kids have had to go through. I had always thought there was at least homeless shelter in these kinds of communities, but I guess I was wrong. I was shocked at the amount of foster homes these kids have gone through, with either being taken away from them or just simply running away. Now although the notes were very detailed and I thought that they were very good, they were just simply too long. If there was any way to cut back and maybe condense some parts together, that would make it not as extensive and not as arduous. Another thing that may not actually help your writing but it may help the reader would be the text colors and fonts. The text color for your notes is the same color of your background just extremely light, which for me makes it hard to read, and as for the fonts, they are changing in almost every other blog post whether it's smaller or if it's a completely different font. I think that by making some of these changes to your blog it would help a little bit.
As for the responses, like Kelsey said, it seems that you're just repeating everything you say in your notes which makes it kind of pointless. If you to just discuss how you felt about the topic of the article or how you felt about a movie, it would dramatically change the way your responses are put together. I found that the sources used were wonderful, using movies, books, articles, magazines, and databases this helps with extensive knowledge and maybe the opinions and viewpoints of other people who have experienced it.
All and all I found that what you have done for this blog is great, I found the topic interesting, especially when being told from the viewpoints of kids that have had it happen to them.

Your topic was very interesting. I admired the fact that you chose this topic when most people tend to look the other way and ignore this worldwide problem. Your notes very detailed and thorough, giving the reader a good review of the facts you have aquired. My only advice would be to add more concrete facts into your notes. Of course the real life stories make this topic come across more dangerous and intense, although when you write a statistic it tends to back up your story.
The responses were very well done also. I thought it was interesting how you saw the responses as a chance to develop your notes to a more complex level. However, don't forget to write your personal thoughts and review about the source for every response.
The development of your topic is very well done and I did feel like each set of notes brought a new idea to the table. It would show that you have a deeper understanding of the topic if you were to occasionally write your own personal opinions on the matter.
I did not find any connections in this particular topic, however I could see people reading these notes and finding many connections.
Blog organization is very good, colors are fine and citations are complete and correct. Your responses and notes are titled correctly, and overall, your blog was very well done.

Second Peer Blog Responce

This is so cool that your researching this. I knew that slave trade was a big issue but the facts are eye opening! When I read about how so many of our official are unaware about this I was shocked. I would have thought that there would be more places for people to go to but there isn’t. All the facts that you have posted are really interesting. I was shocked to find out how many children are in slavery just in the United States! I think your asking really good questions and I think that this will continues to lead you in the direction that you want to go with your iSearch.

You said that “words and phrases in italics are information that needs to be looked up for further details”, I don’t understand; almost everything is in Italics.

In your responses you have a tendency to repeat almost all your notes again. If you have your notes in your notes post and your responses in you response post we would be able distinguish what you think about the issue and what the notes are.

Also maybe it’s just me but I’m getting confused between all of your different font sizes and types. Some posts are in the same font and some are different. It’s hard to distinguish what is what.